Dragon keeper cover12/21/2023 ![]() The mountains in the background are quite large and a simply amazing view to behold home to the ice dragons. There was also a vast clear blue ocean that the water dragons inhabit. It was an expansive forest with many tall trees and strange plants. To improve that you could write "I found myself in the land of the dragons. They were a grayish color with white snow on the top. The mountains in the background are amazing. It was a huge forest, but then there was an ocean. The land you introduced could use a bit more flavor for example you wrote "I was in the dragons land. ![]() Some things that need work are the descriptions and aside from that are a few errors. It's me again with another review after i read this chapter and it adds more information and description and like i said before i like the story. We all ate, in silence, all thinking about were the fifth person was. We cooked the rabbits with a fire we made. The others came back with a three rabbits and some berries they found. "Not." I heard her say under her breath, but I pretended not to know I heard her. I know you wouldn't hurt them anyway Edith, you're to nice. ![]() "They won't hurt you as long as your don't hurt them. "I told you Edith." I said as calm as possible. "I don't know, but these dragons are super scary looking." We need one more Dragon Keeper from the fifth Kingdom." We were all very confused about where the other person was. That's what I pretty much found out about the others that I've met so far. Edith had blonde hair and sparkling blue eyes. She was short, but was good with a spear. He had dirty-blonde hair and greenish-brown eyes. We didn't know where the fifth person was. I will protect you if anything goes wrong." "They are nice, as long as you treat them with respect." "Hey Edith, I'm Sasha, and there's no reason to be scared of these creatures." She started being scared of them when she read a fiction book that one time a dragon ate a whole town of people." Also she read a lot about these creatures in private. So now she fears them because people used to beat her for this belief. Edith told her parents of this dream, and they moved to Twilight Kingdom, where they don't believe in Dragons. When we were kids it was always her dream to become Dragon Keeper. "She was born in Star Kingdom like me, but then she moved to Twilight Kingdom. "Anyway, why is Edith scared of dragons? Why is she even Dragon Keeper." "I came from Shadow Kingdom, and she came from GreenVille Kingdom." "Star Kingdom." Savannah said "And you came from. "Then why did she want to be Dragon Keeper?" Peter asked. "Well, Edith here is a little scared of dragons." "What's wrong." I asked approaching the girl. "Hey, quit chit chatting, we got an issue over here." He got cut off by another girl in the background. "So, Sasha, I want to get to know you a little bit." Honestly though, I don't want to be one, so now I live here. I wish I lived in a Greenville kingdom like you." "Oh, you came from sweet, wonderful, magic land." "I don't know, but what kingdom did you come from?" I mean, since we will be working together." "Oh, well in that case, I guess we should get to know each other. "Well there's five kingdoms, so there should be five people." One person from each kingdom gets to become a Dragon Keeper." My voice cracked as I said this, as if I was scared, but I wasn't. "What do you mean?" I asked sounding confused. "I can't believe I own all of this!" I said with excitement. The water dragons live in the water, most other dragons live in the forest. "Wow, I own all of this?" I said under my breath.
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